This week room 23 learnt about metaphors.A metaphor is saying that something is something using the word like something i.e snow is freezing cold.I felt drawing my cloud and hail was really hard.
Hi Lara! I really like how you added all of the senses- Like taste, sound and sight. I also liked how you put a short explaination on what you did and what you were learning. Maybe next time you could add a WALT? Other than that I really think this piece of writing was a good one! Keep up the good work! Ruby H
Hi Lara! Great Post! I like how you added your senses in your poem too! What a great description of hail!I also liked how you explained what you were learning! Next time maybe add why you are doing it, or what you learnt! Other than that, fantastic post!
Hi Lara Excellent Job on on your metaphors! When you say hail is a snow it reminds me of when I ate a snow cone. Why do you you say hail is a snow cone when it is not snow? Perhaps next time you can use a easier font to read it easier.
Excellent job on your 8 metaphor sentences. this reminds me of when i did my poem i wish i could do something like that. Why did you chose the hail.I wonder if next you could do a scary poem
HeLlO Lara Awesome poem you got there tis poem reminds me of when I did my first ever poem. does hale Actually taste like Kava Juice or is it just a joke [YUK]
Hi Lara! I really like how you added all of the senses- Like taste, sound and sight. I also liked how you put a short explaination on what you did and what you were learning. Maybe next time you could add a WALT? Other than that I really think this piece of writing was a good one! Keep up the good work!
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Hi Lara! Great Post! I like how you added your senses in your poem too! What a great description of hail!I also liked how you explained what you were learning! Next time maybe add why you are doing it, or what you learnt! Other than that, fantastic post!
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ReplyDeleteExcellent Job on on your metaphors! When you say hail is a snow it reminds me of when I ate a snow cone. Why do you you say hail is a snow cone when it is not snow? Perhaps next time you can use a easier font to read it easier.
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ReplyDeleteExcellent job on your 8 metaphor sentences. this reminds me
ReplyDeleteof when i did my poem i wish i could do something like that. Why did
you chose the hail.I wonder if next you could do a scary poem
Already did that
DeleteHeLlO Lara Awesome poem you got there tis poem reminds me of when I did my first ever poem. does hale Actually taste like Kava Juice or is it just a joke [YUK]
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